I can not believe that I am writing a book. I am kind of excited but then again scared (laughs) but I pray that everything turns out fine and that the kids will like and learn from my book. The first lines are very important because those are the words that determines if the reader wants to keep reading or drop the book and go to another book. I hope that is not what happens when people read my book.
I am thinking of having something about Bailey in the opening something like "Bailey was a poor boy that lived in Jamaica and was very shy." I do not know if that is coming on too strong or not. Or should I say something about Tya like "Tya was very spoiled brat, she loved to make other kids feel less than what they really where but one day she met a friend that changed her whole personality." Yeah... I think I like that opening better. Leave me your honest opinion and if Jarelle comments before you that shows that you are a slacker ( laughs ) I am just kidding.
- Taj Brimmer <3
You're funny Taj.
ReplyDeleteI like that second sentence you have for an opening. You state the main characterand give us a bit of a "what's gonna happen?" feeling. I'd make a few changes though,
"There once was a spoiled brat in Jamaica named Tya who loved to make others feel bad about themselves. However, one day, she met a friend who would help her become a better person (or, she met a friend who would help her to change into a better person)."
You don't have to choose that sentence, it's just me, brainstorming. The only thing is, who is your main character? You want to open with Bailey and Tya...but which one is important? Which one makes the three wishes?
I know! You could have,
"There once was a spoiled brat named Tya who lived in Jamaica. She would always make others feel bad about themselves, until she meets the shy Bailey, who helps her realize what it means to be a true friend"
I like that sentence =D Once again, you don't have to use it..
Have a nice day =D
OO COOL!! I am going to use that sentence. Thanks home skillet!
ReplyDeleteps. this shows that everyone is a slacker. (laughs)
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